Rai15

Not exactly the best comeback ever, but nonetheless I'm back and this is new. 

There are some grammar errors that I haven't changed yet, and a Commentary is available on the piece. 

Not sure about posting this, I'm not sure whether I'm any good at fiction writing. The title is only a working-title, I haven't yet thought of anything else. 

This is the second version, revision were by 'olebut' - this version sounds better, I think. 

It just happens to be my point of view, and I'm sorry if some people aren't too keen on it. 

3rd poem; from "Whispers of a Mind" & "Beautiful Blue Eyes" 

nothing special really... 

This follows on from my other poem; Whispers of a Mind, and there'll probably be more that follow on. 

The parts in italics are supposed to be on indents, but it won't work. 

I will mention that 'burrowed frow' is like that for a reason, and yes it would normally say furrowed brow. 

...Of Blood And Clouds" 

...who knows?! 

Not sure on the structure 

I'm not too sure about this one, because it's not my usual 'field'. 

Yes, Channel Hopping does mean the act of flicking through television channels. Apologies for any typos. 

It's supposed to be in central alignment... but I don't think I can do that on here. It was in central because it gave the poem a more interesting shape and layout. Oh well, it's the content that counts... 

I think i may have posted this before, but got too shy and retracted it. 

Tollund Man is somebody who was found very well preserved in a Tollund bog. He was found with a noose around his neck and it was evident he had been hung. He lived over 2000 years ago. 

All is not as it seems. 

Some things are better off unexplained i suppose. 

Read it, then feedback on what YOU think it's about.