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Grass Wars
Posted: 20 June 2004 Word Count: 74 Summary: It just happens to be my point of view, and I'm sorry if some people aren't too keen on it.
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When the grass is cut and slightly wet, from summer’s dew, you will find us, in that secret place. Where we don’t just skip among the flowers, but we stay young together, while we can. With clumps of grass in hand, we hide and run and creep around, caught up in play, of what we call grass wars. We’ve finished school, and we’re growing up too fast, what innocent fun is there, for adults?
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miffle at 10:13 on 21 June 2004
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Rai, My favourite part of this poem: the first 8 lines... These made me think of lying with a lover in the grass and then the poem took an unexpected turn for me with the introduction of the 'Grass Wars' idea... These lines made me think of primary playing fields at lunchtime ;-) I couldn't quite put these two ideas together... (?) 'innocent fun for adults' lots! even though we're not innocent anymore! Kind regards, Miffle
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Nell at 12:56 on 21 June 2004
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Rai, something wonderful has happened to your poetry recently, I love this, although I don't understand your notes in the summary - how could anyone possibly take exception to this? It reminds me of something similar - rabbit dropping wars - and yes, that was on the cusp of adulthood too. This is special.
Nell.
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Rai15 at 21:21 on 21 June 2004
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Miffle, I understand how you've read it, and the way i've worded it all was to just try to illustrate how I love being 'a child' - even though I'm growing out of it - and that would make it harder to let go. I'm trying to get people to really emphasise with it, and go back to happy memories.
Nell, I've put what I have in the notes part because I didn't want anyone to think I was a cocky youth presuming that all adults are boring. I know adulthood isn't boring and adults arn't boring either, I just like being able to get away with throwing grass at my friends, as I don't see many adults being so immature - maybe it's just where i live.
And as for the change in my poetry, I had a bit of a mini-awakening, and realise life's too short to be dark, I might as well enjoy the good times while they last.
Thank you both for your comments,
-Rai-
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roovacrag at 21:56 on 21 June 2004
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Rai.. Very true. Wish we could hold time to our happier years and not grow up too quick.
Well said and well written.
Wish I could go back all those years.
xxx Alice
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