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Sitting Stationary
Posted: 15 March 2004
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Sitting
stationary
wondering why I’m moving
wondering what’s so hard to understand
Why’s it all so difficult
why don’t you know
can’t you tell me
can’t you get your act together?
Can you do something more
can you make me alright
For the sake of sanity
fix this mess
Fury doesn’t help but
fighting doesn’t work
Crying seems all I know
crying for anything but this
Change the way I’m feeling
chase away the demons
When do you plan to help?
Warped reality consuming all
What to do
when I’m moving
sitting
stationary
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 Fearless at 15:09 on 15 March 2004
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Frustrating, despairing; seeing them swallowed by circumstances, rather than fighting back with responses. I liked this Rai.
fearless
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roovacrag at 18:58 on 15 March 2004
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Very frustrating,its growing up and everything seems to change all at one go.
Wish i could chase your demons away
wipe away your tears
comfort you
hold you near.
Life is not easy and takes time to adjust.
Well written,hope you feel better for writing it.
I enjoyed this Rai.
xxxxxxx Alice
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Rai15 at 19:47 on 15 March 2004
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Thanks both of you, you're too kind. :)
Writing always makes me feel better, it's why I write, but how long i'm better for varies.
Thanks again
-Rai-
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The Walrus at 13:54 on 16 March 2004
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You articulation of frustration, despair, darkness is always so real, so vivid. Another good piece Rai.
The Walrus
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Ellenna at 09:44 on 17 March 2004
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Hi Rai.. I am a big fan of your poems.. they always capture the emotion and this is no exception.. the frustration and desperation and the feeling of going nowhere fast..keep writing..
Ellie ...
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miffle at 11:05 on 17 March 2004
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Rai, lots of questions, lots of contradictions, who will help me?, will anyone ever understand me? - some deep swirly thoughts and the frustration of 'sitting stationary', going round and round in circles, when really what you want is to make a great big leap ahead in understanding or otherwise... (?). There are always going to be uncertainties in Life but there are always going to be people out there too who will understand... The hard part sometimes is finding them. Enjoyed this, write on, Miffle ;-)
One thought: 'Fury doesn't help but/ fighting doesn't work' - wondering if 'and' is what you need here in place of 'but'? Just a thought.
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Rai15 at 17:40 on 17 March 2004
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Walrus & Ellie, thank you very much.
Miffle, you've pretty much got it down - and i agree it can be very hard to find these understanding people.
Thank you all for your thoughts.
-Rai-
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