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C.D.H.S.

by Rai15 

Posted: 09 July 2004
Word Count: 36
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Chronic pain
sickness
dizziness
nothing less

Daily thrills
and daily spills
every time a single
daily pill

Headache tighter
pushes harder
round and round
faster faster

Syndrome pulling
at the skull
twirling, dancing
on puppet strings






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Bobo at 09:28 on 11 July 2004  Report this post
Rai - I love the imagery and rhythm of this - it has a real manic quality to it which seems to pull the reader in and then carry them away. At the same time though it has a darkness belying the playfulness of the rhythm. Well done - you've managed to achieve so much effect in so few words.

BoBo x
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Rai15 at 19:31 on 11 July 2004  Report this post
Thank you very much, glad it is effective.

-Rai-
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