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Cystic Claustrophobia

by Rai15 

Posted: 06 March 2004
Word Count: 328
Summary: I will mention that 'burrowed frow' is like that for a reason, and yes it would normally say furrowed brow.

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Always standing
always standing
always glaring
always yelling
always staring at me
as if a circus freak had come to town
as if you donít know how to act
as if some dirt penetrated your perception
Perhaps you stare for amusement
perhaps you shout to show off
perhaps you hurt because youíre hurt
perhaps youíre just too blind
to see what goes on
to see reality
of others
of minds and means
of darkness growth
and evil truth

Try to breathe
try to focus
try to hold it together
for you
for me
for an old eternity
that seems to hate me
that wants to break me
that yearns to see me cry
at your feet
at your will
at request
at the foot of a madman
because Iím scared
because Iím wounded
because Iím frightened
because the walls are closing in
around me

Ever considered
ever wondered
ever realised somethingís not quite right?
Never cried
never screamed
never woken up in sweats?
Seen the pattern
seen the program
seen the way itís all laid out?
Notice coincidence
notice bad timing
notice how it all goes wrong?
Give in
give up
give it all youíve got
Fight yourself
fight fate
forget the rules

In my sickest hour
my weakest state
you glow
a shine of optimism
so bright
so white
yet not white enough
for darkness not to penetrate the light
Iíll crawl onward still
look for the end
of the tunnel
Lost in a suffocating maze
nervous, twitchy
loosing sleep
from microscopic scars
tearing at my heart
ripping into gashes
Start, stutter
burrowed frow

Big dreams
hope and ambition
happiness and
smooth waters
gliding steadily
No warnings
nothing so polite
just the pain
as it all gets worse
Fuss and nonsense
itís not just my age
Wading in bliss-less tears
through a shrinking world
Finding it so brutal
so difficult to breathe
Sheltered eyes
half-shut eyelids
Itís so hard to walk
with pockets filled with liquid

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roovacrag at 19:19 on 06 March 2004  Report this post
ouch babes,
I feel the frustration,the need.
You have put all your feeling here in this poem.

Don't be frightened you have friends,don't be lonely as a lot on ww are here.
good poem.

Rai15 at 19:21 on 06 March 2004  Report this post
Thank you very much. It means a lot, so, yes, many thanks.


The Walrus at 10:51 on 07 March 2004  Report this post
Nightmarish, raw, painful and flowing.

Particularly liked:

'Wading in bliss-less tears' and

'Itís so hard to walk
with pockets filled with liquid'

Very powerful Rai.

The Walrus

Fearless at 11:29 on 07 March 2004  Report this post
Never has a four corned room (in the house, in the soul, anywhere), seemed so frustratingly grim. Good one, write on,


Rai15 at 13:53 on 07 March 2004  Report this post
Thank you both, glad that I've achieved a powerful effect with this.


EmiliaDG at 16:14 on 26 March 2004  Report this post
I really liked this one Rai. It had some very powerful imagery and ideas in it and, i think worked really well exactly as it is. I'd like to offer some 'criticism' for this one but I think it's just right. Well done.

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