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Frozen

by Rai15 

Posted: 21 March 2004
Word Count: 46
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Broken mirror,
blood from
broken skin
Shards of a
normal life

So cold without
protection
Fierce storms
arctic winds
icicles grow

sweeping across my face
feel the crystals
in my hair
moving not but eyes
watching seconds tick

slower and slower
until, quite
simply, they
stop






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roovacrag at 07:23 on 22 March 2004  Report this post
Well done,a good one. loved the second stanza.
Broken mirror,seven years bad luck.
This was nice and tight and meaning clear.
xx Alice
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igbit33 at 21:05 on 22 March 2004  Report this post
I like the way the rhythm to this broke down as it went on, adding to the overall feel - like the seconds ticking.

Ig. xx
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Rai15 at 15:24 on 23 March 2004  Report this post
Thank you both for your comments, i'm glad that you both like it.

-Rai-
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