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Blossom

by Rai15 

Posted: 31 July 2004
Word Count: 83


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My pale sweet heart
would blossom as a rose
if held within your hands.

If the thorns were to prick you
or make you bleed, do not
give up hope or faith.

A thorn is there but to deter
those who are not dedicated
to press on and pursue.

Though if you were to
put this rose aside, out of mind
it would surely wilt and die.

Do not forsake a rose
for frivolity or peer, because
if you love, love will repay.






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poemsgalore at 13:57 on 31 July 2004  Report this post
Another very mature piece of work Rai, especially

"If the thorns were to prick you
or make you bleed, do not
give up hope or faith."

keep up the good work.

Rai15 at 21:17 on 31 July 2004  Report this post
Thank you very much, I much appreciate your comments and I'm glad that you like the piece.

-Rai-

roovacrag at 22:07 on 31 July 2004  Report this post
Rai......... another good piece.
Thorns are there to deter a predator, only a lover will overcome the thorns and climb the tower to your heart.

xx Alice

olebut at 10:19 on 01 August 2004  Report this post
Rai

again a profound piece and good imagery.

well done

david

The Walrus at 20:31 on 01 August 2004  Report this post
I like the gentle sense of hope in this poem Rai. For me it has a Japanese feel to it. Weird?

The Walrus

Rai15 at 11:54 on 02 August 2004  Report this post
Thank you, David and Alice, for your comments. Walrus, I'm not too sure where the Japanese feeling came from, but it's interesting to know - after all everyone interprets things differently.

Thanks again,

-Rai-


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