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Spiral

by Rai15 

Posted: 20 February 2004
Word Count: 91
Summary: ...who knows?!


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On and on
Darkness grows thicker
Fall under
to wake in hysteria
Her heart stopped
She yelped as her conscience
took over

In fury
she screams
Hyper-mania escalates
she cries
amid the walls of muscle
so right
so true

He’s always there
to calm her down
and take her high
Plug in
Turn on

Creation, depletion
an unintended absolution
Her tears
golden as honey
much sweeter
All for him
for he is all

Shallow breaths
one last shriek
A gentle sunburn
She drops out
asleep forever
Images in her eyelids
him.






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roovacrag at 20:24 on 20 February 2004  Report this post
Lovers are always in a dream that spirals.Grasping to catch him,always in her minds eye. well done.xxAlice

The Walrus at 21:27 on 20 February 2004  Report this post
Hysterical and passionate. Sounds almost drug induced. Manic feel to it. Is it love or the love of something different, a high, an adrenlin rush?

The Walrus

olebut at 09:26 on 21 February 2004  Report this post
as I have said before you wirte well beyond your years a good piece prophetic and full of imagery

take care

david

Rai15 at 10:48 on 21 February 2004  Report this post
Thank you all very much, I was a bit wary of this piece as I didn't really know what I was writing really, just kept writing. Also, when I first started writing it, it was going to be about something much different, but it just progressed away from that I suppose.

I think that it could be both love and the love of something, like a high, but as I said I didn't really have anything in mind - so it's open for everyone to take it however they feel.

Thanks again, much love

-Rai-


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