nickb

First attempt at a love poem, any ways of improving it gratefully received! 

Thanks for al the really useful feedback. Have tried to listen to it as much as possible. 

Just a bit of fun......a few versions you may not have come across. Happy Christmas 

Not sure about the ending....may be a bit cheesy 

I can only apologise profusely to John Masefield...... 

Sorry it's been a while....manic year. Not sure if this works or not? 

I can only apaologise..... 

It's a lovely little place on the Orwell.....great crab salad. Maybe this could prompt an exercise around the theme of water.....if anyone fancies it? 

I was making a cup of tea one rainy night a while back and an image popped into my head. Funny the things that stick. This is very much a first draft so would welcome your thoughts. Hopefully it's not too mawkish 

One for the world issues series. Not entirely sure about the title but hopefully you'll get the gist of what it is really about. 

Sorry it's been a while. This one was inspired by a radio programme. 

First attempt at Haiku!! 

Memories of a childhood spent living by the sea 

Edited version..... 

Nothing for six months and then two at once, sorry. Not sure that all of this makes sense but interested to get your views..... 

A little place in Surrey where my Mum is, and where I was christened 

Sorry, it's a bit gloomy. One of those days I guess. 

Inspired by an experiment I heard on the radio recently where they recorded a message in a cave, played it back, recorded the play back, time after time until the message had virtually disappeared and all that was left was the resonant frequency of the cave. Weird. 

This actually happened....in general. 

Had a go at revising parts of this, hopefully it has ironed out a few wrinkles. 

Back to the seaside again sorry. Not sure about the ending. 

Sorry it's been a while. Not sure if it's a bit sentimental or not. 

I think this is better, although not sure about the title now! 

Been a while sorry, hopefully back to it now. This is a re-working of an old idea. Not entirely sure if it's finished yet. 

I've always like industrial history and the remains of this rail line passed close to our last house. Not sure if the format of this works though..... 

Revision 1 - does this make more sense? 

A bit late coming to the table for Oonah's request for moon poems, but here it is anyway.