The Bar Stward

My studio has been asked to pitch a animation to a production company in Hollywood. This is our first draft. Some of the dialogue needs improving but at the moment I would just like to know what you think of the general script. Thank you We will be making an animatic (storyboard with audio, so they won't see the script, hence if its not formatted 100% correctly, its okay) The Bar stewards is a surreal cartoon comedy about 3 lads who run a bar in a strange seaside town. 

My studio has been asked to pitch a animation to a production company in Hollywood. This is our first draft. Some of the dialogue needs improving but at the moment I would just like to know what you think of the general script. Thank you We will be making an animatic (storyboard with audio, so they won't see the script, hence if its not formatted 100% correctly, its okay) The Bar stewards is a surreal cartoon comedy about 3 lads who run a bar in a strange seaside town. 

My studio has been asked to pitch a animation to a production company in Hollywood. This is our first draft. Some of the dialogue needs improving but at the moment I would just like to know what you think of the general script. Thank you We will be making an animatic (storyboard with audio, so they won't see the script, hence if its not formatted 100% correctly, its okay) The Bar stewards is a surreal cartoon comedy about 3 lads who run a bar in a strange seaside town. 

Its back! Mother has just discovered what has happened and nuclear war is coming to town 

The perils of time travel 

Sci fi comedy adventure about the perils of time travel 

This is a new edit, to help pick up the pace by rearranging the events 

Big changes in this latest rewrite of the comic perils of time travel 

A short film about time travel 

This is a screenplay for a short film about time travel, which I will be filming soon. 

Jacob is finally about to enter the Queens legs to steal new customers for the karaoke competition his brother Clint has arranged for the coming Sunday night. Jacob has also just learnt that a TV show will be filming in his pub the coming weekend too. PART 11, the previous chapter, is very short, and it might be worth rereading to refresh memories as it has been quite a while since I have uploaded new material. 

Hello I'm giving serious thought to submitting this and I have just finished some artwork for it (http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2491/4183230652_ba7c8d1e16.jpg)  

Hello I'm giving serious thought to submitting this and I have just finished some artwork for it (http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2491/4183230652_ba7c8d1e16.jpg) 

Join Jacob as he battles for success with a little (well, no) help from his idiotically dangerous twin brother Miller, his disastrous best friend Curly and his annoyingly cool younger brother Clint. On their journey they値l face terrible perils, monstrous foes and maybe love (or just sex). Though the following is a large upload, you will see that it is made up of small diary sections, so you can read as little or as much as you like.  

Join Jacob as he battles for success with a little (well, no) help from his idiotically dangerous twin brother Miller, his disastrous best friend Curly and his annoyingly cool younger brother Clint. On their journey they値l face terrible perils, monstrous foes and maybe love (or just sex). Though the following is a large upload, you will see that it is made up of small diary sections, so you can read as little or as much as you like. 

I've done another rewrite. I've made it a bit simpler and gave the story more scope for interesting illustrations. If by chance it ever did see publication, I am imagining a 32 page book, with double spread pages. Each paragraph below would either feature on one page, or run along the two. Let me know if you thing it is worth pursuing, and be honest, I really don't mind, better than wasting my time. 

Hello. This is my first attempt at writing a childrens story. I am also a illustrator and would love to create a childrens picture book. The Teddy Scare is very much a work in progress and I would very much appreciate any help or advice you can offer. Thank you. 

Hello all. I haven't written anything on Barstewards since September but now I've got my new laptop, I'm ready to pick the baton up again. To reintroduce everyone to what is going on I've just written quite a sort 'PART' to get the ball rolling. I hope you enjoy it. Scott 

Join Jacob as he battles for success with a little (well, no) help from his idiotically dangerous twin brother Miller, his disastrous best friend Curly and his annoyingly cool younger brother Clint. On their journey they値l face terrible perils, monstrous foes and maybe love (or just sex). 

Join Jacob as he battles for success with a little (well, no) help from his idiotically dangerous twin brother Miller, his disastrous best friend Curly and his annoyingly cool younger brother Clint. On their journey they値l face terrible perils, monstrous foes and maybe love (or just sex).  

Jacob experiences his first morning in his new job. 

This is the first draft of new Bar Steward material. Below we find Jacob about to start his first day as a licensee of the new pub he and his family have just taken over.  

This is the first draft of new Bar Steward material. Below we find Jacob about to start his first day as a licensee of the new pub he and his family have just taken over. 

Join Jacob as he battles for success with a little (well, no) help from his idiotically dangerous twin brother Miller, his disastrous best friend Curly and his annoyingly cool younger brother Clint. On their journey they値l face terrible perils, monstrous foes and maybe love (or just sex). Though the following is a large upload, you will see that it is made up of small diary sections, so you can read as little or as much as you like. 

This is the complete sketch show myself and four other writers wrote back in the summer of 2008. Obviously this is a very long submission but the sketches are short, so read what you can and hopefully you will come back for more later.