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here's a little romantic thing I've been fiddling around with, no need to comment, just thought it might entertain 

Here's another gobbet of Charlie for bedtime reading! 

This is all I've written, and I'm afraid there's an awful lot of shagging in this portion. Do let me know if I should carry on - with the book, not the shagging! 

nothing much happens in this bit, but here it is, anyway 

There's a certain amount of sex in this - hope it doesn't make you want to nominate me for that Bad Sex Writing award! 

very short chapter. I have problems with my chapter breaks! 

A change of scene 

is there a point to this chapter or is it simply mystifying? 

moving on swiftly... 

tell me, can you tell from this chapter how it was that Corny was able to meet him at the gate, or do I need to spell it out more explicitly? 

transition too abrupt from the last chapter? Neve and Efa turning up a bit implausible? 

Now this is a seminal chapter and various people have told me to get rid of the man jumping from the train, because it simply isn't explained in the book - although it's hinted at. The whole incident basically points outside the book to the next one and to the parallel worlds context which isn't really covered in this one. Does it work? Do I really have to get rid of the jump from the train? It's central to my whole idea of the book. 

Hope this chapter doesn't seem too much like telling and not showing! 

for a little light relief, here's the beginning of a chicklitty thing I did one day when I was pondering how annoying it is that heroines always have interesting jobs rather than the crappy dull ones people actually have...