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Now this is a seminal chapter and various people have told me to get rid of the man jumping from the train, because it simply isn't explained in the book - although it's hinted at. The whole incident basically points outside the book to the next one and to the parallel worlds context which isn't really covered in this one. Does it work? Do I really have to get rid of the jump from the train? It's central to my whole idea of the book. 

Hope this chapter doesn't seem too much like telling and not showing! 

transition too abrupt from the last chapter? Neve and Efa turning up a bit implausible? 

tell me, can you tell from this chapter how it was that Corny was able to meet him at the gate, or do I need to spell it out more explicitly? 

moving on swiftly... 

is there a point to this chapter or is it simply mystifying? 

A change of scene 

very short chapter. I have problems with my chapter breaks! 

This is all I've written, and I'm afraid there's an awful lot of shagging in this portion. Do let me know if I should carry on - with the book, not the shagging! 

Here's another gobbet of Charlie for bedtime reading! 

nothing much happens in this bit, but here it is, anyway 

There's a certain amount of sex in this - hope it doesn't make you want to nominate me for that Bad Sex Writing award! 

here's a little romantic thing I've been fiddling around with, no need to comment, just thought it might entertain 

for a little light relief, here's the beginning of a chicklitty thing I did one day when I was pondering how annoying it is that heroines always have interesting jobs rather than the crappy dull ones people actually have...