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So the project is back on again :) Graded reading books for primary school age 

next installment - all comments appreciated 

for younger readers (probably 9-12 

short story aimed at WW. 

Can you glean any more of Eliza's character from this? 

historical fiction for 11+ I've only done the first draft so far, and by writing the synopsis, I hope to clarify the plot points. But I'm rubbish at synopses, so any comments gratefully received! I know it's a tad long, but I'm trying to get it all in. Does it make sense? Where do you feel the holes are? 

Quite a short chapter (hacked it a lot) - might end up combining is with the next one. 

formatting has come out a bit dodgy - just ignore strange indents or lack of! 

Please forgive any odd spaces or gaps - I lifted this from a Publisher file, where the words fit round the pictures. Aimed at 4-7s 

Next chapter 

back with Barnaby's pov - not sure how the formatting will come out, with the eye test chart. Hope you can read what it says! 

Jumps to a different set of characters in a different location. Back to Barnaby in Chapter 3 

No title yet! Calling it 'Specs' for the time being. Need your comments esp on pov as the chapters progress. 

I know this is probably too long. Also need to find the 'voice' and smooth over plot details to give an overall picture... but how?!