Tray

I am studying poetry as part of my degree course and I am just putting together my End Of Module Folder. I am hoping to include this so any feedback would be great. It is part of a sequence of poems entitled Snapshots Of Urban Life. 

Hi all, this is for my folder. I like the idea of having longer sentences in this poem as it is a more wistful piece. I am also reading C.K.Williams anthology Flesh and Blood which is great and has influenced me in my formatting. But I would appreciate any comments on how I could improve this piece. And what about the title? Is it too cliched? Many thanks for any help. Tray x 

Here's a terza rima, (inspired by my first Salsa class last night). I struggled a bit on a couple of end rhymes - any comments would be fab... Tray x