Mattyai16

Sorry to post this from the beginning again, but again some small things have beenaltered. Olny a few words in the first scene, but the fraction of the second scene i previously posted has evolved quite a lot in language terms. What do you think of the end to the scene? Do you think I should continue and finish it properly with the love scene? Or leave it as an imagination task for the reader? Criticism, comments and suggestions are, as always, extremely welcome (and much wanted). 

The end is first, then the beginning of them. Very rough in places but i had to write it down while i had some inspiration (3AM this morning). Im entirely unconvinced by the second scene, as i feel it drifts off towards the end, but comments, criticism and advice is very very welcome! 

The start of a novel, but end of a story. Very early, pretty jagged around the edges.. but i like it for some strange reason. I feel it has emotion, and depth which really isn't there... I also have an idea for a story behind it.. I might have found my story, and perhaps my style. Perhaps indeed. 

Child Fiction possibly? Judge for yourself really. I didn't write it for an audience at the time, aside from my teacher at GCSE English (I actually received a shocking 40/40, what are standards coming to!). Yes, it was a coursework at GCSE, well this is a fraction of it. <Gasp> How could i submit it?!? Good question! Ah well, not very good really, but if you like fantasy then give it a read please.... 

A short introduction to perhaps a novel? I'm not entirely sure yet. 

just a small possible introduction i wrote. Just came to me, have no idea of a storyline as of yet. 

The 2nd part of the Torrential Shortcomings story... mmm I'm not so sure about this bit... judge for yourself though. Plenty more to come if comments are made! 

A thriller based around the life of a man who comes home from work on Valentines day to find his wife dead. This is a complete mystery to him, and as the story goes on the reasons slowly unfold....