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A prize for the first person who manages to trawl through the whole story! It ran away from me, and is 1600 words over my self-imposed 5000 word limit. So what happened? Is it overpopluated? Too convoluted? I would like to reign it back in a bit, so I would welcome suggestions. I haven't given too much more thought to the imperative problem, so it is still in the story for now, for better or worse. Part one is slightly revised (only slightly), and the rest begins with the bold text. 

This is the first part of a short story I wrote a few years ago. It is about two diabetics whose lives entwine after they meet at group therapy. The language is completely different from the way I write now, but I am eager to revisit the story and make some changes to it!