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Av Jo & the Mag 7: Ch 17 by
mafunyane
Word Count: 1757 5 Comments Jo is on her own in the bush waiting for Kenny. Some of this may be familiar as it has been rehashed from an earlier chapter. All comments appreciated. Particularly wonder if too many different things are going on in this one chapter.21 Jul 2009
Average Jo CHAPTER EIGHT by
mafunyane
Word Count: 2893 5 Comments I think I know what the reaction to this chapter is going to be. The question for those who've read this and the previous chapter is really whether I should get rid of them (as non-essential to the plot) or is there (as I hope!) merit to the incidents themselves. (I also like this chapter because it shows both Kenny and Jo being strong and working together - which becomes important later. But maye I don't need all that...). All views appreciated!17 Jan 2009
Average Jo CHAPTER 5 by
mafunyane
Word Count: 3555 6 Comments This is a bridging chapter - between the end of day 2 in Camp (where Jo visits the Elephant Hall) and the next week. I want to get to a stage where Jo is a bit more settled in the bush. But this does mean quite a lot of TELL not SHOW at the start. Does it work?13 Nov 2008 Latest Activity
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