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Word Count: 2113 10 Comments I posted Chapter 7 some time ago you might remember, which I think I will end up making Chapter 1. This is the chapter that comes next, with a bit more on Yasmin's panic attacks and her relationship with her husband John. Interested in whether John is convincing or OTT; whether the metaphor (captivity) is corny; whether you sympathise with Yasmin being trapped or are irritated by her passivity. Thanks!22 Sep 2008 Latest Activity
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