Dominic

Hope you get past the first paragraph. Thanks for your time. 

This came from a writing class exercise. I'd invite people to tear it apart and give as much constructive criticism as possible. 

I've finally finished this one! I posted two sections before (which have been re-worked and are contained in this section). I'll stick up a new section every couple of days. Look forward to yoru feedback. 

Thanks for all the feedback on the last piece. This is a rather big chunk because it didn't feel right to divide it further. There'll be just one more piece in a couple of days. 

Thank you so much for the feedback on the other sections. 

So I lied. I said this would be the last posting but that would have meant hitting you guys with a 6000-word chunk. SO here's the penultimate episode. Thanks for all the feedback and comments. 

Please read and tear apart!