I have now uploaded my contribution and it was good fun!

I love exercises like this. My English teacher used to write opening lines and titles on the blackboard to give us inspiration and I'd race home to get started. Oh, to be that age again when life never seems to get in the way.

Anyway, I'll try my contribution when I've moved house!

Does anyone else want to suggest some others!

Cath

I have already uploaded my contribution but am looking forward to seeing if tc can make a poem. As I am not a poet and don't know the first thing I am looking forward to it. But as inspiration I thought that I would do a stanza to help you tc )

As she opened the car door she changed her mind
And it wasn't as if she was being unkind
It was just she had other things to do
Than go to his and have a screw

Just a bit of fun. Looking forward to reading someone with more talent though tc!

james (anthony)

Cath

Can I suggest that we only have one line going at a time?

I don't know how anyone else others feel about this, but perhaps we can put off suggestng a new line until eveyone who wants to have a go at the current one has drained their creative juices (if you see what I mean.)

James

Raw talent, eh? That's how we like it!

I'm sure our friend tc will very much appreciate the start you have given her. It's just her style!

Maybe the time of your posting has something to do with it!

Best wishes

John

Did consider doing a limerick, though that really did turn the air blue!

I am currently ill and unable to sleep hence the late posting. THInk I may have been feverish!

Ye Gads, What people think of me!
Thanks chaps..you know me too well!!

James, you poem is a veritable work of genius. (well...er...it rhymes)
Actually it's far better than mine - possibly because mine doesn't exist yet. I'm having a bugger of a time with this, I think I've read too many stories and now can only see this from one angle. Need to clear my head and head off on a tangent somehow.

"As she opened the car door she changed her mind......"

Bum! Inspiration deserts me, am off for a quick bowl of soup, some string sphagetti and a word with the Iron Chicken. She usually sorts me out.

Check in later, hopefully armed with verse
:x (does this one work?)
tc

tc

The Iron Chicken???

The Clangers - or a Deep Fat Fryer?

The Cuddly One

All I would say is that you could use the opening line as a red herring.

As she opened the car door she changed her mind. SHe was going to walk there instead...

I wanted to write one which wasn't about relationships, I hope that mine is sort of ironic and tragic. Here is a woman who has found her life out of her control and she had a chance to get it back. BUt when that opportunity is taken from her she decides that she wants to do something about it. BUt this decision takes control of her life (and body in the immediate aftermath) away from her once and for all (also she's been drinking so doesn't have full control to begin with).

I wanted it to be obvious that it was inevitable...hence the old storyline of a married man running away with her. It was obvious that was never going to work, hence the tragedy.

Glad you liked by poem; maybe there's talent there after all. I can write Westlife lyrics (nope, I'm not even that good. GOd I must be poor!)

James

Why the need to explain what your piece was about? Doesn't it - can't it - speak for itself?

Once you have committed your words to paper - or posted them on the site - it is for the reader to make what they will of your work.

What if I came to the conclusion that your piece was actually about something else, something you had not considered? Greed and/or violence, perhaps. Is that a problem for you? Or for me?

Let your words rest. You've done your bit. It's now between me (the reader) and your text. Personally (and please don't take this the wrong way) I'm more interested in what your words mean to me, rather than what you wanted them to mean to me! If the two don't match, where is the problem?

I think I'm paraphrasing Philip Pullman here (His Dark Materials, and all that) - but then, I think he's absolutley right!

And I'm glad that someone liked your poem!!

Regards

John

RE explaining it, just thought I'd tell tc where I was coming from for information really.

I see what you mean, but I enjoy the discussion as well as the reading, but that may be my background in philosophy coming out. I love a good debate and a debate on peoples' ideas is always fun.

But I understand that people do like things to stand on their own and sometimes I like that too.

now for a limerick...no, I couldn't do that to you!

Hellooooooo,

I have just today become a full member! Drinks all round everybody!

I've uploaded my contribution to this thread -hope you like! Now off to pick up my daughter from school.

Laters!

Nahed x

Hooray! Well done!

Psst!
OK gang... she's signed up... she's not looking... we can nobble her now...

And I thought you were a nice person!!

(Pass the bottle. Ta!!)

John

I love random line exercises, it's amazing how many different ideas people can come up with.

Just added my attempt, under the title 'Random Line Story'.

Now i'm going to go off and read everyone elses

Louise

Welcome aboard! Hope you can stand the tension!

John