Apology? Why??? It's excellent!!! Very inventive. The format creates such a weird world. Yours is kinda metaphysical - very arresting. Most impressed!

Thank you.

Richard.

Excellent Nell! I'm going to have to have a go.......
Sue

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Gadzooks! Silly youth! How would doddering granddad deliver rap poems? Silently? Yes. Should do opposite. Existential limerick. Know what? That teenager’s suffering. Grand delusions, short term memory. You urgently yell – “lout, typhoid!” Did doctor regulate everything? Gathering geriatric crone, evangelical lad, drive ever round, doing great things. Sweep paranoid deliberation nearer. “Reality, yonder,” reckons senior. “Rot,” thinks son, noting gramps. “Solemn notes. Sober rhymes.” Still loquacious. Somehow wandering gift transcends society. Younger rappers seldom make enough hard dosh, however. Raw words, spent talent. Trying gilt tablet. Tripping!

oh how writewords' superb brainbox sends some excellent thoughts. So on now with heartfelt try.! Yes, soon, Newyear! .. Revellry.. yomping..glorious satyric champagne evening! Going gooey Yolande excels..shimmying, grasping golden naughty young guys. She excites some..even now! With her rather rare energy ..yesterdays soul lady yanks some esoteric coolcat to ogle endless stars. She elucidates such horoscopic conundrums said dude escapes...so onward dances she. Every year repeatedly. Yo!

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damn!! lol... instead of brainbox sends read xeroxes :)

Sue, Ellie, brilliant, I'm loling all over the place here. '...grasping golden naughty young guys...'!!! no such luck...

And jimbob - I somehow missed yours - genius!

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Richard - kind words, thanks. This was a beast of an exercise! The point is presumably to test vocabulary and write within tight constraints, but it struck me that when writing one doesn't normally have to think so hard about the next word one types. Now if one did make a point of thinking hard, that would be bound to have a beneficial effect on one's work. Q.E.D.?

Dazzling great talent tonight to one's satisfaction, noting glorious Sue effort then nice erotic cleverness, such hot text tangle Ellie essayed. Delight to observe epic comment, thanks. So obviously you understand, dear rational, linchpin Nell. Let the envious sulk. Keep playing games so glad.

Richard.

Thanks. That was good fun. When do you set us another challenge?
Sue

It's becoming a challenge to think up new challenges! Unless my brain seizes I'll post a Christmas one but if someone else can beat me to it I'd be delighted!

Richard.

This I found one of the most challenging excercises I have ever particiapted in I appreciate the criteria was prose and I guess I have neded up with a free verse poem but I submit it for what it is worth




Christmas,
so often no one ever remembers Santa’s special legacy.
You understand distributing gifts,
so often, new, wonder retail latest toys.
Silence, excited,
daren’t tell lest tomorrow,
when new wonders supplement the evergreen Norway……….

You understand dear relatives sending greetings,
socks, slippers, scotch,
how wonderful leaving gifts.

Somewhere else Ethiopia, Albania, another relation,
numb bereft, tears shower,
repeated death here everywhere.
Everyone expresses shame, emotion never released,
dying, ghosts, starvation.

Noel, lavish hearth
hot toddies, supplements super repast
towering gastronomic,
conscience ever remember reality
yuletides starving ghosts.

This I found one of the most challenging excercises I have ever particiapted in I appreciate the criteria was prose and I guess I have neded up with a free verse poem but I submit it for what it is worth, although I have failed with the first and last letter being the same



Christmas,
so often no one ever remembers Santa’s special legacy.
You understand distributing gifts,
so often, new, wonder retail latest toys.
Silence, excited,
daren’t tell lest tomorrow,
when new wonders supplement the evergreen Norway……….

You understand dear relatives sending greetings,
socks, slippers, scotch,
how wonderful leaving gifts.

Somewhere else Ethiopia, Albania, another relation,
numb bereft, tears shower,
repeated death here everywhere.
Everyone expresses shame, emotion never released,
dying, ghosts, starvation.

Noel, lavish hearth
hot toddies, supplements super repast
towering gastronomic,
conscience ever remember reality
yuletides starving ghosts








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and then for some reaosn you got it twice arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

happy whatsit everybody

utterly brilliant. worth sending twice!!
Sue

David - that's brilliant... if I didn't know it was an exercise I would still think it was a great poem! (if only it could rhyme too!)

Andrew )

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oh and I also loved Richard's phrase - 'dear rational, linchpin Nell' A ;)

Richard it was immensely challenging but great fun..( love your hot text tangle etc. lol

David what a genius ! Streuth..
Looking forward to more challenges...

Ellie..

Ellie and Andrew

thank you for your accolade strange isnt it when I was writing the above poem I spent a long time trying to get a last line that complied with the criteria and couldn't mainly for the lif of me I couldn't think of a wprd which ended in 'C' I even tried changing the first line to make it easier.

having then posted the piece I thought of

the word which described my state when I couldnt end it

panic then they came tumbling out of the far reaches f what I laughingly call a brain

scenic panoramic etc etc etc.

oh well

david

ps andrew yes I wished I could have got it to rhyme as well I amy be brilliant but sadly my IQ fals 10 short of being a genius (


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despite the two typos sorry

I know this is a little late, but I was going over the writing exercises and this appealed.


War raged. Dreams still light the ever-rueful lives.
Silence. Even night trembled.
Day yearned daylight's sanctuary.
Yesterday yields suppose'd destiny.
Years spent tearful, lamenting.
Grieving generations, swift to open new wounds.
Slaughtered dreams; shed death here, effusion.
Nestle Earth, heal life, end dire evolution.
No outcasts, surrender rightfully your ruthless spite.
Even now, we echo our reprehensible events.
Standing grandly, yet through hell-led doubts still survived.
Deliver repentance, enter righteous sentiment that tears shreds; slivers so offensive, even newts slither, repulsed.
Dreams survive even now, when 'nothing' gives slight to open negotiation.
Never reckon, nor reap people's suffering.
Greet tomorrow wishful, loving, giving.
Guard division; neighbours settle, enemies search hearts, stop parting - gather.
Reclaim mankind, denature evil. Listen now.

Nahed

Very nice! .. and a bit clever, too!!

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