Please point out errors in punctuation, (not commas)
Did you understand it? It's sources and authors.

The tale we tell is as long as it is complex, it's accuracy, paramount. The souls of many will be judged upon the basis of testimony. Where I can bear witness, I am indeed able to testify. I will speak of what I did see. I cannot speak of what I did not see, for that would be hearsay, gossip, the idle and wholly inappropriate chatter of of ill-educated women. For guarantee of anonymity, I will permit another to tell of what he saw. We are broadly in agreement as to our respective accounts of this chronicle of tragedy. Without prejudice, you are informed of my desire for decorum. The other, rest assured, you may rely upon for expedience and variance, although a foreigner, known to refuse a hearty breakfast. I can divulge, the other, a stubborn man. My position has improved, I will not tell you who I am.

There shouldn't be an apostrophe in the it's in the first line.

As LBD said, plus:

"The other, rest assured, you may rely upon for expedience and variance, although a foreigner, known to refuse a hearty breakfast."

doesn't quite work. It helps if you leave out the comma after foreigner, but it still stumbles, I think. And this is odd:

"I can divulge, the other, a stubborn man."

what is the speaker divulging?

And a semi-colon not a comma here:

"My position has improved; I will not tell you who I am."

Emma

Thanks.

I've sinced changed it. I've got two different styles of writing. When I enjoy the task (slightly archaic,, overwritten) Then there's the chore (childish, simplistic).

As an experiment. I thought I'd write a novel with alternating narrative. Archaic on first, child on third. Expanding this and throwing in some cliches, Archaic became almost victorian... and then there's the cliche. Whose on first? (Albert and Costello). For the child, you can't get more childish than Dr Seuss's Sam.

WHO, thinks of advancement throughout life but dreams of his big break (hitting one out of the park)

SAM, continually refuses the opportunities presented to him.
That's the plan anyway.