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  • Time lapses
    by charlottetheduck at 15:19 on 17 July 2007
    I'm a bit confused...

    In my novel there's about a year where nothing actually happens - my MC is miserable, waiting around for the love of her life to break up with his partner, working in a dead end job and that's about it...

    Anyway, I obviously don't want to 'write' this year. But at the end of it, stuff starts to happen. Has anybody got any ideas/advice how I can get around this?

    At present I have a nasty little summary paragraph before the action begins again basically saying 'Emma sat around all miserable waiting for Pete to break up with Lucy for a year and then...' but it seems v expositional.

    Is this the only way of writing about her year in limbo land?
  • Re: Time lapses
    by debac at 15:44 on 17 July 2007
    If it were me I'd just pitch into the new action, but lay little clues here and there that time has passed.

    Deb
  • Re: Time lapses
    by charlottetheduck at 15:46 on 17 July 2007
    Yes you're probably right Deb...hmm hadn't really thought of that. Guess it's the patronising side of me wanting to explain everything to the reader again...!
  • Re: Time lapses
    by EmmaD at 16:27 on 17 July 2007
    Pitch in and see clues, or, crudely, head the new section with the new date.

    Or, though I've never tried to do it for a whole year, it's amazing how you can slide over time in a sentence or two, and yet take the reader with you, not in a looking-back-summarising way, but a very condensed version of going-forward-narrative. This is going to be a really crass example because I need to go, but, say the previous section ended at Christmas:

    New Year was as cold and dark and horrible as I'd feared, and the days lengthening didn't seem to improve things much. By the time the men in the office had given up wearing ties even to meet clients, a sort of settled dullness in me meant I could face accepting Jill's suggestion of Mallorca in September. You could still just about see the marks of my bikini straps above my black dress, I noticed, staring at them in the grim light of the office loo. Why did we have to have a Hallowe'en party, for heaven's sake? Why not Christmas, like everyone else? Only when Christmas did come, I was glad they'd got it over with...

    Emma

    <Added>

    tsk! "Pitch in and seed[] clues"
  • Re: Time lapses
    by charlottetheduck at 22:20 on 17 July 2007
    Thanks Emma, that's really helpful. I'm glad that it's OK to do this sort of thing. I'm starting to panic a lot about breaking the 'rules' and I just wasn't sure what the right thing to do in this situation was.

    Seems like I wasn't too far off anyway. Phew!!
  • Re: Time lapses
    by Account Closed at 22:36 on 17 July 2007
    Use the film rule and start with the heading.

    A Year Later.

    JB
  • Re: Time lapses
    by EmmaD at 09:30 on 18 July 2007
    Films do it because they have to: it's one of the many ways in which fiction's so much more fluid and flexible. 'One Year Later' does the factual job, of course. But if you can take the reader with you by narrating that year in however compressed a form, rather than just skipping it, they'll have that sense of a wodge of time behind them as things start hotting up again, because they've been through it. And that's much closer to how your MC feels. I know that I frequently forget that time's passed in a novel, if I'm not in some way shown it passing. (Maybe it's really a show-don't-tell distinction! )

    Emma
  • Re: Time lapses
    by JoPo at 21:03 on 18 July 2007
    Or you can use the tried and tested public events riff - 'the 30 years War came and went, Louis the Umpteenth painted his palace in gold and vermilion, Hitler invaded Poland ...' etc etc

    Right, that's about 300 years dealt with ...

    Jim
  • Re: Time lapses
    by NMott at 21:51 on 18 July 2007
    Or end on an annual event and restart on that annual event, one year later:
    Everton lost the cup - again


    - NaomiM
  • Re: Time lapses
    by Account Closed at 13:16 on 19 July 2007
    Perhaps I was a bit flippant there.

    JB
  • Re: Time lapses
    by shellgrip at 17:27 on 19 July 2007
    Films do it because they have to


    Hmmm, I'm not sure that's strictly true. Demonstrating the passage of time is one of the key skills of good film-making and it's generally considered a 'cop-out' to use an on-screen display. Apart from anything else, such displays destroy any chance of suspension of disbelief since you're instantly and firmly reminded that you're viewing a film.

    I'd imagine much of the same 'rules' and techniques used by film-makers could be applied to books. Some of the more obvious tricks used in film are to open with a shot of a clock, or of trees in autumn (when the previous scene was clearly summer). Sometimes the plot of the film itself can offer a good marker - for example if the plot involves a derelict house being rebuilt then an obvious clue to time passage is to show it completed.

    A single year presents something of a quandry because it's too long a period for the 'shorter' tricks and yet not long enough for the more long term devices. Also, being a whole year rules out most of the seasonal clues. However, depending on the exact timings involved you may be able to use certain regular events. For example:

    "As he stumbled into the street, Carter couldn't believe that already Christmas lights were again being strung along the street."

    There are several other events you could use; the start/end of the football/cricket season, school holidays, British Summer Time: -

    "Leaning forward to slide the clock back onto it's peg, an hour of his life taken, the walls were suddenly splashed with Jane's blood. Summer Time had started again, but in a year the memories had never stopped."

    or something well written

    There are personal clues as well, of course. Has the MC lost or gained weight? Has he now grown a beard or his hair? Is he losing his hair? Maybe he has a new car and he can complain about how it's done nothing but break down since he bought it after finding his grandfather's hidden Nazi gold?

    Sometimes (and I'm struggling to think of a good example from a published work) it's only necessary to make it clear that time has passed by the style of the writing and how the character behaves. Someone that's been brought to his knees by illness or events can be shown to be behaving in a manner that suggests substantial time has passed. A serious injury can be healed but still aching, a traumatic event now uneasy memories and so on.

    Hope this helps some and isn't rubbish.

    Jon
  • Re: Time lapses
    by charlottetheduck at 17:38 on 19 July 2007
    Thanks Jon, that's really helpful actually. I really liked your descriptions too!!! Lots of good ideas, thanks
  • Re: Time lapses
    by Sappholit at 17:42 on 19 July 2007
    I just say really obvious things like, 'A year went by. It was shit again.'
  • Re: Time lapses
    by MariaM at 19:39 on 20 July 2007
    I think any of these suggestions could work well.. either the blunt 'a year later' or the 'dropping clues that time has passed' ones.

    If I were you I'd just shove one of those in for the moment and plough onwards (I'm sure that's what you're planning on doing anyway)...it's just that when I was trying to write fiction I'd take a relatively minor issue about plot/structure or whatever and use it as a massive thing to procrastinate about. Sure you're a lot more sensible than that though!
  • Re: Time lapses
    by RT104 at 08:11 on 21 July 2007
    I'd like it if we could still do it the way they used to do it in old-fashioned books.

    All through that long autumn and winter, Charlotte sat at her desk, writing away at her novel as the wordcount grew and the leaves turned scarlet and gold and then scattered to the four winds outside her window. When spring came, she was still to be seen there, hunched over the keyboard, the fleece and wool scarf of January and February discarded in favour of lighter clothing, her slippers abandoned, and her bare feet seeking the cool floor beneath her desk. By the time summer was mellowing to autumn once again, the book was almost done.



    Rosy xx
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