I know this is a big ask but if anyone would be willing to help me out by casting an eye over a piece I've uploaded for my submission I'd be very grateful (it runs to around 3000 words)

Now I'm feeling confident with my synopsis and letter I've started to stress over the punctuation of my first three chapters. Friends have been giving feedback in terms of style, content and the rest, but as none of them are english they're about as useful as a barrel full of dead monkeys in terms of punctuation.

Agent submission

Just like to say thanks to Susie, BeckyC and JMac for help on this one. Cheers