I have put up a piece that was on WW a few times last year. It was in the semi-finals of a comp and the critique said it didn't make finalist because it had a plot flaw, as follows.

The fact that the Wings will be touring soon is mentioned, but if Rose knows the creature will die that night, as she tells Olivier at the end, why would she allow it to be scheduled to tour? this is a monor plot thread, but it throws everything out of whack and misleads the reader. Also I found it hard to believe that Olivier wouldn't go to Rose and tell her that he didn't kill it before he ran. we understand why he thinks he will be blamed and not believed by the authorities, but Rose doesn't have to report it unless she wants to. this makes Olivier's decision to flee look foolish.

I have made changes to try to overcome these problems; the changes are in italics, so if you don't want to read the whole thing you can probably skim the rest. I know it's a great long thing, but if anyone's got time, can you give me an idea of whether this covers it?

I'm thinking of putting it in for something else, so any help you can give me will be gratefully received, as will the pointing out of any other flaws or problems.

Many thanks

Sharon


http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/13880.asp

Oh yummmmeeeeeee! One of my favourite stories! Will read asap.

Dee