Hi everyone,
I'm publicising a poem I've written which is to be read at my brother's wedding ceremony. Its very different to the stuff I would normally write and is in neither a form or a style I'm very comfortable with. I'd love any viewpoints on whether or not it works in context...
I've addend some comments to the piece itself which may help readers, but any opinions are gladly sought...
thanks in advance
xx
tc

A link to the poem:
Near-lilac Time

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Try that again:
Near-lilac Time

tinyclanger,

I've got no plans on getting married, but if I did, I'd want someone to write me something as beautiful as this.

S.M.

Aw, shucks! What a really nice thing to say, thanks very much.
x
tc