I Have re-edited the piece that I posted on here, would love feedback.

Also I am sitting here wondering what literary ficton is all about?
As opposed to normal fiction?

Anyone know?

Also does anyone know any clever tricks to avoid using so many she's and he's in your writing.

Thanks

Nycki

My quick definition of literary fiction as opposed to the rest of fiction is that, the more often you read it, the more different, interesting things you see in it. It can be easy or hard to make out the basics of the story at the first reading, it can fit into any 'genre' category or none (except that in bookselling terms, 'literary' fiction is a genre) but it must always have the essential quality: the more you look, the more there is to it.

Hes and shes are annoying, but they're also fairly invisible. If they're really getting out of hand you can swap in proper names at discreet intervals. Don't be lured into the dimsal abyss of recasting your sentences into the passive, but if you change the sentence-structure about, not always subject-verb-object, the hes and shes can suddenly melt into invisibility:

Try turning (sorry, this is hurried)
He put down the glass
She finished her coffee
They jumped when the telephone rang
She picked it up, knocking over his glass

into
He put down the glass
Finishing her coffee seemed to take her ages
The ringing telephone made them both jump
In her hurry to pick it up she knocked over his glass

Nycki, I'm so glad you've become a full-member! Welcome to WW.

I liked the originality of your original upload, so I'll take a look at the re-edited piece.

Best,
Ste

Thanks that was helpful, I have just been edited the first few chapters of my book to get rid of shes and hes, didn't realise I had used so many. What a pain.

One day I hope to write something remarkable without tons of mistakes, lol.

Nycki

Thanks Ste,

that would be really helpful.

Nycki