One thing I've learned about writing since I joined this board is that the writing itself is the least part of it. It's a bitlike laying a carpet: As you get one part nailed down, another bulge pops up.

Recently, I've been going back and forth over what I've already written, trying to make it match. In any event, after my usual arbitrary fashion I've recently completed the gutting of chapter two, which I here present for your delight.

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/11515.asp

Get stuck in and don't spare the whips. In the original version, the chief criticism I had (from Scoops) was that I had failed to show an equivalence between my two main characters. I hope I've addressed that here. In any event, I found the technicalities of this chapter quite murdurous because I had to split it between three different periods: a week before chapter one, just before chapter one and just after chapter one.

I'd particularly like to know if you think I've pulled it off without making the narrative completely clunky.