For those of you who've been following them, I've just uploaded the latest in the zodiac series, The Water Bearer. No prizes for guessing which star sign this one is about.

Sorry it's so long, I'd have posted it in two parts, but it really needs to be read in one go.

It's rather oddly structured so I'd be especially grateful for any comments on this one.

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/2235.asp

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I've taken Becca's good advice and cut about 4,000 words, so it's not so daunting now!