Hello fellow writers!
I have been writing this novel for just over a year now and it is nearly complete. It is a fantasy on love and hate and war and peace. I have created a small sight were people can view my work. However, only chapters 1-11 have been uploaded. I would appreciate any comments or critisism. Thank you.
http://groups.msn.com/SureAsFate

Hello Beth,
I have read through most of the work you downloaded. I applaud your energy and give you full marks for effort. I did find that your reliance almost exclusively on conversation was not to my liking for I felt that you needed to include more descriptive pieces.

This would have created a far more believable background and allowed characters to be better defined at an early stage. I did not find it easy to grasp the plot.

I have a feeling that you 'saw' this in your mind as a film unfolding or certainly in a clear visual sense and your work emerged almost as a script. I would suggest that with fantasy writing the most challenging part is to create that world in which your characters appear.

I am certain that as your work matures so you will develop a first-class pen.

Len