I promise this is the last time I’ll post this chapter, but I thought you all might like to see what a professional edit can do…

Here’s the finished version of the chapter First chapter final version

With the previous version for comparison (I split it into two more manageable chunks)

First chapter first part
First chapter second part

Any errors that remain are my own added after the edit when I added the suggestions made.

I'm not really looking for comments but I hope you find the comparison useful…

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