Those martyrs among you who have masochistically been following my scribbling may find this section a bit confusing. First off, it's out of sequence. Secondly, the events it depicts do not bear directly on the main plot, but they are vital in the psychological development of the main character. However, for those reasons it can be read in isolation from the main body of the story. Since I've been trying to pare down on the verbosity (a justified criticism I've received here in the past) I'd be anxious to know if I've gone too far in that direction and ended up doing too much tell and not enough show. Be brutal.

Oh, and this is only the first part of the section. I'd like you opinions before I get stuck into the rest.

Thanks in advance.

FX

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