I've just got this back with half a page of damning crit which I've tried to summarise at the beginning of the piece while keeping in the summary word limit.

The format has gone wrong because there is a problem with uploading formatted scripts on the site.

Please be honest.

Elspeth

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http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/8019.asp

Thank you to everyone who commented on this - for your support. I feel better now - less raw so I've copied your comments and taken it off the site but will look at it again one day (or just get working on the next one!)

Thank you again.

Elspeth