Ok, I'm still very new to the site but I've decided to be brave - that doesn't mean I want nice comments though! This is not the story that I'm working on at the moment, so it is 'safe' for constructive criticism

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/23808.asp

It is a fantasy story aimed at young adults. The prologue is set eighteen years before the first chapter and focuses on the main character's father.

Please let me know what you think.

Joolz