Hi there, I'm new to all this. I've written a TV series and need some help on it. If any of you could take the time to read it I'd be most grateful. It's a superhero series set in Uk. I won't spoli too much but what I will leave you is the basic storyline and cast of characters.

THE ADVENTURES OF DRAGONIA

SYNOPSIS

Set in modern day times, the action mainly focuses around Panbury, a fictional city in Kent.

A mysterious dark stranger manages to break into Panbury College one afternoon and place a very powerful gas into the college air conditioning system. It effects certain students at the college, giving them strange superhuman powers depending on their character. It alters their mental state turning them into evil villains, or “Student Mutants” as the slang term for this new breed of super monsters

On to our hero, a girl named Flik. She was just your everyday student, young, bright, beautiful and very friendly. Her father is an archaeologist, who spends most of his time digging for treasures.

One day, on Fliks 21st birthday, her dad gives her a strange, yet interesting amulet shaped like a Dragon which he brought down Camden market. Knowing his daughter was interested in gothic items he brought it for his daughter. However things are not as they seem.

Flik soon discovers that the amulet has special powers. Forged years ago by the ancient gods, it was used by an ancient warrior called Amanda Drake to trap the souls of four powerful dragons that once ruled the world. Within this amulet gives the user the powers of those dragons, such as the power of flight and different breath attacks (Fire, Ice, Acid and Lightning). Realising the potential of this amulet, she uses the sexy leather suit that her friend Karen brought her for her birthday as a costume and low and behold! Kent’s first super heroine DRAGONIA is born!

She uses her power to fight off the growing attacks by Student Mutants, but she still has to juggle college work and other things in her normal life. Along the way she meets the evil Mindwarp, leader of the group Team Nocturne and eventually becomes romantically involved with him. Also she soon gains a side-kick called “The Red Shooter” a student that can create energy footballs and has great agility. However, there is a far more dangerous and powerful creature that is following Dragonia. One that has existed for millions of years……….

Dragonia Cast of Characters

DRAGONIA

Real Name: Vicky Thomas
Nickname: Flik
Age: 21.
Nationality: UK
Height: 5’9.
Body Type: Slim, Fit, Athletic.
Hair: Long.
Colour: Dark Brown.
Eyes: Hazel.
Appearance: Tight, sleeveless leather outfit with low cut top, tight leather trousers, heeled boots, Dragon Amulet.
Other Distinguishing Features: Dragon wings.
Powers: Dragon breath, flying.
Character Traits: Has a tough and sexy image. Is extremely witty and very brave, yet slightly gormless.
First Appearance: Episode 1-1
History: College student who is given the Dragon Amulet.

DRAGONIA’S ALLIES

THE RED SHOOTER

Real Name: Glen Steele
Nickname: Red
Age: 21.
Nationality: UK
Height: 5’11.
Body Type: Fit, athletic.
Hair: Short.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: Red football shirt, jeans, yellow trainers.
Powers: Energy footballs, agility.
Character Traits: A practical joker that enjoys a good laugh and hardly takes things seriously.
First Appearance: Episode 1-4.
History: Football fan/Mindwarps Brother

WYVERN

Real Name: Bill Wyvern.
Age: 32.
Nationality: UK.
Height: 6’4.
Body Type: Athletic, muscular.
Hair: Short.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Green.
Appearance: Dark green long sleeved top, dark green combats, dark green boots, dark green gloves, dark green full face mask with red tinted goggles.
Powers: Enhanced strength, speed and agility.
Weapons: Retractable disc blades, super pistols, electronic back pack, various gadgets.
Character Traits: A cross between Batman and Wolverine, and just as intelligent and as deadly as both.
First Appearance: Episode 2-5.
History: Military experiment/Rogue MI6 agent.

TEAM NOCTURNE

MINDWARP

Real Name: Dan Steele
Age: 24.
Nationality: UK
Height: 5’11.
Body Type: Average.
Hair: Shaved.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: Black short sleeved shirt, green combats, black trainers, spiked bracelets, gothic rings.
Powers: Psychic Powers, telekinesis, teleportation, regeneration.
Character Traits: Charming, intelligent, but nasty and very deceitful. Enjoys seducing women, but is not one for realtionships.
First Appearance: Episode 1-1 (as Dan), Episode 1-3 (as Mindwarp)
History: Leader of Team Nocturne/Red Shooters brother.

NEMESIS

Real Name: Kevin Jones
Age: 29.
Nationality: USA/Canada
Height: 7’0.
Body Type: Large, muscular.
Hair: Long
Colour: Dark Brown.
Eyes: N/A
Appearance: Tight Red T-shirt, long red trousers, black leather fingerless gloves, black shoes, full faced skull mask.
Powers: Superhuman strength.
Character Traits: Like a gorilla, extremely aggressive and very dangerous, but is also a gentle giant to those who know him.
First Appearance: Episode 1-3.
History: Former Wrestler with disfigured face in bar brawl.

SPIDER-MAI

Real Name: Sally Johnson
Age: 16.
Nationality: UK
Height: 4’9.
Body Type: Slightly Chubby.
Hair: Long, ponytail.
Colour: Brown with purple high lights.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Short sleeved purple shirt, short purple skirt, spiked leather bracelets, spiked dog collar, gothic rings.
Powers: Spider webs, sticks to walls, agility, poisonous saliva.
Character Traits: An angry and emotional young girl who needs someone to look after her.
First Appearance: Episode 1-3.
History: Abused child.

DECIBEL

Real Name: Sarah Crawford.
Age: 20.
Nationality: UK/Spain
Height: 5’5.
Body Type: Slim, voluptuous.
Hair: Long.
Colour: Blond.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: Low cut yellow top, long dark yellow skirt, bright green high-heeled boots.
Powers: Super sonic voice.
Character Traits: Dumb blonde, but also dangerous.
First Appearance: Episode 1-7.
History: Wannabe pop star.

THE SISTERHOOD

GOTH

Real Name: Brenda Stone.
Age: 22.
Nationality: UK.
Height: 5’9.
Body Type: Slim, voluptuous.
Hair: Long.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Brown with panda style eyeliner.
Appearance: Long black gothic dress, black high heel boots.
Powers: Tarot cards.
Character Traits: Her cards are her weapons.
First Appearance: Episode 1-5.
History: Leader of the Sisterhood.

TAIGER

Real Name: Anusia Brena.
Age: 27.
Nationality: African/Mixed Race.
Height: 6’8.
Body Type: Slim, Muscular.
Hair: Long.
Colour: Blond.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Black sleeveless T-shirt, long black elbow length fingerless gloves, black trousers with flame design, black collar.
Powers: Superhuman strength.
Character Traits: What she lacks in talkative nature she makes up for in pure aggressiveness.
First Appearance: Episode 2-5.
History: Strongest member of The Sisterhood.

LIZZIE

Real Name: Jennifer Flambeaux.
Age: 19.
Nationality: Australia
Height: 5’8.
Body Type: Slim.
Hair: Long.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Green.
Appearance: Black see through T-shirt showing red bra, camouflaged combat trousers, black trainers
Powers: Reptile abilities, transforms skin to green hard scales.
Character Traits: Imagine a crocodile mixed with a snake with a hint of a kimono dragon. You’re not even close to how dangerous this girl is!
First Appearance: Episode 2-5.
History: Daughter of an outback crocodile hunter.

NAILS

Real Name: Alison Block.
Age: 20.
Nationality: UK.
Height: 5’7.
Body Type: Slim.
Hair: Short
Colour: Blond.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: White tie up top, jeans, high-healed shoes.
Powers: Razor like nails
Character Traits: You wouldn’t want her to run her fingers through your hair, unless you wanted your head cut open!
First Appearance: Episode 2-5.
History: Former beauty student.

OTHER STUDENT MUTANTS

METALMORPH FIST

Real Name: Brad Johnson.
Age: 27.
Nationality: Scotland.
Height: 6’0.
Body Type: Average, muscular.
Hair: Medium.
Colour: Blond.
Eyes: Brown
Appearance: Camouflaged army outfit with short or rolled up sleeves.
Other Distinguishing Features: Tattoo over left arm, right arm completely made of metal.
Powers: Morphing metal arm.
Character Traits: Violent and destructive even for a squadie. Has friends in high places.
First Appearance: Episode 1-2
History: Discharged squadie.

PANDA MONIUM

Real Name: Dwayne Wilson
Age: 17
Nationality: UK.
Height: 5’0 (as Dwayne) 7’11 (as Panda Monium)
Body Type: Small (as Dwayne), huge (as Panda Monium)
Hair: Short (as Dwayne).
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Blue (as Dwayne), Red (as Panda Monium).
Appearance: A giant panda (as Panda Monium).
Powers: Superhuman strength, animal instincts.
Character Traits: Outer meekness and gentle nature hiding animal like rage and strength.
First Appearance: Episode 1-6
History: Disability student.

THE DEVOURER

Real Name: Ammit Sayeed
Age: 23
Nationality: Egypt.
Height: 6’1
Body Type: Fit, athletic
Hair: Bald
Colour: N/A.
Eyes: Brown
Appearance: Head of a crocodile, body of a bear, legs of a hippo.
Powers: Superhuman strength, animal instincts.
Character Traits: A monster with a heart.
First Appearance: Episode 2-2
History: Friend of Red.

SHADOU RYOSHI

Real Name: Sho Kanama
Age: 22
Nationality: Japan.
Height: 6’3
Body Type: Average
Hair: Short.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: Dark blue ninja suit.
Powers: Energy shurikens, stealth, invisibility, duplication, lighting fast reflexes.
Weapons: Ninja sword created from psychic energy.
Character Traits: If the price is right, he’ll do the job.
First Appearance: Episode 2-3
History: Ninja heritage/Bounty hunter.

FLASHDANCE

Real Name: Victoria Bennett
Age: 18
Nationality: UK.
Height: 5’9
Body Type: Fit, athletic.
Hair: Long, bunches.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Red sports bra, black-running trousers, white shoes.
Powers: Super speed, super agility.
Character Traits: Upper class snob that is used as a front to hide jealousy.
First Appearance: Episode 2-1
History: Jealous performing arts dancer.

ZEALOT

Real Name: Michael O’ Hara
Age: 24
Nationality: Ireland.
Height: 6’0
Body Type: Average
Hair: Short.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Black shirt, black trousers, black shoes, glasses, priests collar.
Other Distinguishing Features: Angel wings
Powers: Holy fire, flight.
Character Traits: Fundamentalist catholic with dangerous powers.
First Appearance: Episode 1-4
History: RE student who believes he’s an angel.

THE MULLET KING

Real Name: Jimmy Bamboo
Age: 30
Nationality: UK.
Height: 6’7
Body Type: Overweight.
Hair: Short.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: Black T-shirt with heavy metal logo, red striped leotards, white trainers, long mullet wig, talks in a naff American accent although his real voice is that of a post Englishman.
Powers: Sonic waves, lighting strikes.
Weapons: Custom flying V guitar.
Character Traits: Rock and Roll!
First Appearance: Episode 1-2
History: Heavy metal fan.

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Real Name: Sarah Roberts
Age: 23
Nationality: UK.
Height: 5’6
Body Type: Average.
Hair: Medium.
Colour: Brown.
Eyes: Blue.
Appearance: White lab coat, brown trousers, black shoes, glasses.
Powers: Download information, lighting bolts.
Character Traits: Always wanting more knowledge.
First Appearance: Episode 1-1
History: First villain Dragonia meets.

CHIMP PAIN ZEE

Real Name: Unknown
Age: 32
Nationality: UK.
Height: 6’6
Body Type: Overweight, hairy.
Hair: Short.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Yellowish trunks.
Other Distinguishing Features: Hairy beard.
Powers: Gorilla strength, gorilla agility.
Character Traits: Don’t call him a monkey!
First Appearance: Episode 2-7.
History: Man that thinks he’s a chimp.

FIRESTARTER

Real Name: Peter Pyro
Age: 28
Nationality: UK.
Height: 6’9
Body Type: Average.
Hair: Short.
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Green.
Appearance: Fire fighters uniform.
Powers: Pyrokinesis.
Character Traits: Prefers to cause fire rather than put it out.
First Appearance: Episode 2-7
History: Ex-Fire-fighter.

MONSIEUR STINK

Real Name: Pierre Le Pew
Age: 26
Nationality: France.
Height: 5’11
Body Type: Chubby.
Hair: Medium
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Brown.
Appearance: Blue stripped jumper, light grey trousers, black shoes, red beret, onion necklace.
Other Distinguishing Features: Silly moustache.
Powers: Stink.
Character Traits: French, enough said!
First Appearance: Episode 2-4
History: French.

DOMINOR MALUS

Real Name: N/A
Age: Unknown (human form looks around 60)
Nationality: Unknown.
Height: 6’5
Body Type: Medium.
Hair: Medium.
Colour: Dark.
Eyes: Dark.
Appearance: Long purple hooded robe.
Powers: Chaos magic, metamorphosis into huge black dragon, super human strength.
Character Traits: Pure evil.
First Appearance: Episode 1-8
History: The fifth dragon and the ultimate evil force.

SAEVITIA

Real Name: Amanda Drake
Age: Looks 25ish although she has existed for centuries.
Nationality: N/A
Height: 6’1
Body Type: Slim, fit, musclar.
Hair: Long
Colour: Black.
Eyes: Red.
Appearance: Wears no clothes, has pink scales all over her body except her hands and feet, vampire like teeth, clawed hands and feet. Similar to Dragonia, yet intensely evil.
Other Distinguishing Features: Dragon wings.
Powers: Chaos magic, dragon breath, flying, super human strength.
Character Traits: Disturbingly beautiful yet extremely evil. The opposite of what Dragonia stands for. A pure manifestation of rage and hate.
First Appearance: Episode 3-1
History: Amanda Drake corrupted by the powers of the amulet. Acts as Malus’s daughter.

Any help would be appreciated. Thanks guys!

For those who lack the patience to find it themselves:

THE ADVENTURES OF DRAGONIA

Ok, maybe I should have made a link to my script in the first place. Apologies for that, I'm still having some teething problems with this site.

Thanks IB. Samuraipanda, I'm sure you'll have some people look at your work if they can just use that link.

Thanks Anna Reynolds. Like I said I'm not quite sure how this site works just yet, but will get the hang of it soon.

Anyone think I was being too spacific with the opening post on this page? Maybe I should't go into too much detail, it's just that I thought it might be a good idea to do a cast list for my story, maybe I need to cut out some of the less important characters.

Typically it's sufficient to give a brief introduction to your work, and link to it. As a new member, you are of course excused for not knowing to link to your work when introducing it.

Many of our more experienced members who persistently fail to do so have no such excuse.

Welcome to WW.

Thanks Insane Bartender. I'll shorten the post asap. Cheers

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Please ignore this post now, I'm going to do a shorter version of this post to make it up to standards for this forum. Sorry guys!