Its written, all I need is some feedback from all you lovely people, it would be so appreciated. Only one person has read the book and he called me at the end and said it brought tears to his eyes. I had to apologize for making him cry but thanked him for the emotional response to the twists and turns that concludes at the open end. Thank you in advance for any comments, only joined the site today so still getting used to how it all works.

A Million Lies Away
Into Africa
By Nicky Wilder

Books synopsis(65,000 words)

Charming Apache is a Big Game Hunter and con artist rogue who trades in wild animals, guns and ivory from South Africa and Zimbabwe. He takes a bet with his partner in crime Auzzy that he can get feisty Nikita to marry him and then leave her at the altar as a revenge for the 3 years Auzzy spent in jail because of her fiancé Colyn, who is lost at sea and presumed dead. Apache who gets Nikita down the aisle is deceiving her behind her back for money. Apache unexpectedly falls in love with her but he still can’t be truthful or faithful to her stringing her along with his lies.

Colyn survives on the secluded wild coast of the Transkei with the help of a Sangoma Witch doctor who nurses him back to health but his memory is gone. Nikita chose to go to the Transkei’s Coffee Bay on her honeymoon where they nearly bump into each other, due to a car accident he ends up fixing her car which jogs his memory but not enough to make him leave the surfers paradise until one day he hears a song on the radio that remands him of her and he sets off to find her.

Nonstop travelling from the South African Wild Coast, Gauteng, Timbavati, Zambia to Zimbabwe and house boats on Lake Kariba, meeting Lion, Elephant, hippo, crocs, baboons, snakes and spiders plus other colourful characters they meet along the way who want to jump on the band wagon of their adventure, they all get burnt in the process...

A clip from the book...

‘Eduardo you stop drinking now!’
A man walked over
‘You guys ok?’ he asked in an amused grin, he looked interested in joining in on the party, he had heard Nikita and Jane discussing how wonderful a few days on a house boat was going to be, if they could just get there.
‘My names John and my dad owns this place’ as he stretched out his hand to shake Piet’s hand and then Eduardo, who now placed his drunken glare on John.
‘Hi’ said Nikita stretching her hand out ‘Our Kombi has broken down and is on the forecourt, I’ve no idea whats wrong with it’
‘And what’s your name?’ he asked as he stretched out her arm turned her hand and kissed it; she was flattered and could not help flashing her eyelashes at him.
‘Charmed’ she said as she pulled her hand away as Apache approached the bar and Eduardo handed him a cold beer.
‘Who’s this?’
‘Hi I am John I was just offering you guy’s some help, we own the place and you look like a fun lively crowd of people’ he said ‘Can I help you with your car? But on one condition you let me join you on this trip?’
He looked deeply into Nikita’s eyes as if he had just scored himself a new girl friend. Apache seizing the opportunity putting his arm around John and spinning him away from Nikita
‘How about, a tank of petrol, a bottle of anti-freeze and a load of booze’?

Hi, Nicky and welcome to WriteWords.

If you have any questions about the site, feel free to ask.

I see that your novel is complete at 65,000 words. This is a little short for most of today's agents and publishers, (with the exception of Mills & Boon) who prefer books to be at least 80,000 words. So if you can find another 15K it would certainly help your submissions.
Also, when submitting a synopsis to Agents it is important to include the ending.
I see you've also uploaded this in the Archive, so I'll comment on the extract there.


- NaomiM

Hi Naomi
Thank you for your comments, much appreciated. Although the story is written it is still in draft and yes I can add another 15k to the story, more and more comes to me as I re-read it. Back to the drawing board ;o) I am glad I have found this site. Kindest Regards, Nicky.