Hey everybody,

I'm at home feeling very unwell today so I thought I'd try and cheer myself by writing a short style synposis for Feeling Gravity's Pull.

So if you feel like might like a go at ripping the heart of my work please feel free.

Geoff

Geoff,

I could not 'reply' on your site but I did read your synopsis. I would suggest that you change the word 'play' to 'perform' or even 'give'. I did not quite understand the word 'act' when referring to her attempted suicide. I think you mean telling her how he felt about her..?

Otherwise, nice and compact.

Len (one of the nit-pickers)

Cheers for that Len,

That's the kind of stuff I really wanted, I want it picked to pieces so that the end product will be flawless.

Cheers

Geoff