Chapter 10 of Terrestrial is uploaded with a summary at the start for anyone who needs it. I'm wondering if it's too long or too descriptive.

And many thanks to all the people who have been commenting on my stuff and supporting me with advice and encouragement over recent weeks. You know who you are

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/6238.asp

Good to see you're back to posting this Sharon and it's still of a frighteningly high standard.

Best
Sion

Thanks Sion, I've had my little holiday and feel back in gear with it now.

I've made some cuts and amendments (the Georges section) to the first part, down to 'They’re not particularly bright'.

I'm still considering taking out the martial artists in the tube and the bit about the trapeze artists falling. Whaddya think?

For me, I wouldn't take them out, if there's a way to condense them a little.

Take care
Andrea