I’m stalled with chapter 16 because I’ve had what Stephen King calls a thinking-above-the-curve moment. Ever since I wrote that scene where Fynn appears to be bleeding to death, I’ve been worried that I might have peaked too early. I couldn’t think how to top that without actually killing him off – which I would prefer not to do if I can help it… although I never rule anything out.

Then about a week ago the solution appeared in my head, not exactly fully formed but near enough. I made a few notes and then went back to C 16. But I can’t do it while this scene is clamouring to get out of my head. So it may be a while before I post the next chapter.

In the meantime, I need a bit of help from those of you who have followed The Winter House from the start.

Someone has suggested that I cut out chapter one’s opening scene with Fynn and start at the point where Georgia is standing in the doorway. He thinks this first scene tells too much of how Fynn feels about the house and therefore kills the potential for mystery.
What do you think? Now that you’re a good half-way through the story, is this scene telling too much too soon?

I’ve just uploaded the prologue and chapter one again (oh no! Not again!) so you can skim-read it. I also realise now, after re-reading the first meeting between Fynn and Georgia that I’ll have to write it again. I know his character much better now and I’m sure he wouldn’t be so dismissive and arrogant towards her.

So much to do… so little time…

Thanks again for all your help. It’s much appreciated.

Dee
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Hi Dee,

Fynn's scene follows on well from the prologue. We are in the same house but in the present time. We are intrigued he feels attached to the house but has never been there before.

“What is it, mate? Seen a ghost?” - Great line, ties in well with the prologue.

For me without Fynn’s scene there is no mystery. You’d be crazy to get rid of it.

Dawn,

Oh thanks, Dawn. That’s given me yet another perspective. Isn’t it strange how two people can see the same thing from completely different points of view?

I’m inclined to agree with you because I really like the scene but I understand why my partner suggested cutting it. I’ll see if anyone else comments.

Thanks again.

Dee
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Dee,
Just read Ch 1 and I agree that it seems fine as it is. The trouble is I'm now so intrigued I'm going to have to find the time to read the rest. One thing that did grate on me however, was when you described what he was wearing, is it set in 1987? It's probably just me being picky though.

Gina.

Thanks Gina, that’s 2 to 1 now in his favour!

1987? I'm intrigued. Why do you say that? He’s in his working togs, that’s all.

I’m pleased that you want to read more but, unfortunately, I’ve taken the earlier chapters off the site. I don’t feel comfortable with having it all uploaded at the same time. I’m planning on posting a synopsis of the story so far but it will have to wait until I’ve finished this big crisis scene I’m working on.

Many thanks for your help.

Dee
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Dee

I'd leave it as it is. It works for me. I'm repeating what Dawn and Gina have already said, but the transition from the prologue to the first chapter works too well to dump that scene.

And, in any case, what's wrong with setting out at that stage Fynn's feelings for / attachment to the house? If you don't do it there you'll have to do it at some point - so much of the interplay and interaction between him and Georgia depends on it.

My advice (for what it's worth) is to leave it as it is.

And as for thinking above the curve - I can't even reach the curve!

All the best

jumbacks xx

Awww… thanks Jammydodger.

I think you guys have won the toss. I think the scene will stay.

And, Jumbo, your curve looks great from where I’m standing…

Dee
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