Please, please, please could you take a look at the following:

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/5839.asp

It's the outline/ idea for a feature length animated piece.

You may have seen in the Jobs and Ops section that a new animation studio are looking for a short script, plus an idea for a longer feature. An Uneasy Alliance was my script for the short piece, this is my idea for the feature length.

As it has to be submitted by the end of the month, I don't have long to make any changes!

I'd really, really appreciate any thoughts whatsoever.

Ben

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Oh, and it's the very, very first draft, from head to page, so it's probably full of typos too, but I'll try to find things like that before I even think about sending it off!