Hey folks, I wanted time to work on this to enter it into the BBC's monolgue competition. This was as far as I got, and submitted it anyway.

It's something I had done a while ago, and I tried to rework it. As it comes from a time when my writing was a bit mixed up - and even though this is a complete rewrite, I'm can't really look at it in an objective way, and can only see the bad.

As such, if you do tell me that it is honestly really bad, I won't be at all upset, and all I really want to know is if it actually makes sense. It does to me - but I wrote it, and I assume too much sometimes some times.

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/4660.asp

So please, give it a look. I usually know if I've written something that's let me down and needs scrapping, but this one, I just can't tell.

So please be honest!