Hi gang,

Ok, this is what I've been working on for the past three weeks, a kind of mini novella that slots in with the story begun in 'Jesus in a Chat Room'.

I know its rather long, and how little time you all have, and I'm asking a lot here for a thoughtful review, but it would be greatly appreciated. I promise the next part will be a standard length!

Love yas

James x

Any takers?

I'll have a look right now. If it's huge I'll print it out and read it.
Sue

I'll have a look right now. If it's huge I'll print it out and read it.
Sue
PS - 23 pages! May not have time to comment today!

Wonderful! I loved it and have commented now!
Sue

I'm planning to read it over the weekend but, right now I need to work on my next chapter.

Will comment soon.

Dee

Wicked! Loved it.

Dee

Thanks guys for all your helpful comments. I've fixed the typos now and I'm posting again to refresh it on the list. I usually refresh three times before I let the archive swallow it.

James x

Ok, and once more round the block for the last time. The next part of the story will be posted here next week! Dee, if you're reading this, how come you haven't replied to my email?

James x

a last refresh Then I'll leave you all in peace

James, I'm sorry! You wouldn't believe the stuff that's been going on here in the last week... I just forgot... sorry...

I'll have a look at it as soon as I can and get back to you.

Dee