The rough draft for my first book is done. What do you link so far? You can take a look at what I wrote here: http://www.orble.com/life-with-chronic-renal-failure/

Here is a little taste from Chapter 9:

I had a harder time starting back on dialysis. First the sent me to North Side Hospital in Warren, Ohio. They were less than competent. They technicians would stick me with the 17 gage needles 2 to three times and not be able to access my site. They would call the Dr. to do it or sometimes just keep sticking me until they got it. I was throwing up every treatment. The technicians there wouldn’t let my mom stay with me while I got the treatments. One of them even said I was being a baby.

I told my mom I would rather die than go back there. She complained and they treated her like she was stupid because this was what dialysis was like for people. At least the people at that unit I guess. My mom talked to my local Dr. and my Dr. in Cleveland and had me moved to a Sheron, Pa Dialysis Center.

They Sheron Center was much better. My mom could come in during my treatment. And they didn’t have nearly the same amount of trouble sticking the needles in my fistula. There were a few people that were better than others, but those were the people they had sticking me 90% of the time.

Hello JJ, and welcome to WW.

I've had a look at your site. I couldn’t get any idea where you are with your writing – how long you’ve been at it, what else you’ve done, how much feedback you’ve had – so it’s difficult to comment.

Why not upload the opening few pages – say around 1000 words – on here, and then ask for specific advice. Click on ‘Upload work’ in the top right hand corner, then follow the prompts. Be sure to let us know what level of feedback you'd like. If you need any help finding your way around the site, either post a question in the Newcomers forum or contact Nik Perring or myself direct.

Best wishes,

Dee