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Blood

by Zettel 

Posted: 16 May 2005
Word Count: 157


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Blood

In blood and sinew
nerve and bone
we are born
In that first
unwilled gasp of life
the myth of blood
is incarnate
an afterbirth
of superstitious dread
progenitor of hate

My blood is up at
transubstantiated lies
brothers washed
in the blood of Jesus
soaked in the death
of other forms of love
blasphemy as a nation dies
for the glory of God

God willing
the Fuhrer prayed
blood lust without restraint
slaked by Mein Kampf madness
of Aryan pure
of Jewish taint
and youthful sacrifice

Blood the children
in the agony of the fox
as the blood of martyrs
stains the soil of faith
humble love misused
in the vanity of
conjured metaphor

Water to wine
wine to blood
men always men
shed the life
of innocence
to appease the wrath
of sacrificial gods

And the Koran enjoins
recite
in the name of thy Lord
who created Man of a blood clot




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Ticonderoga at 14:46 on 19 May 2005  Report this post
Some great stuff here - maybe too much! I'd remove the 'bloody' from the martyrs line; one too many. But, that section to me is a fine example of the best of this.....

'Blood the children in the agony of the fox' is a masterly line, and that stanza is altogether excellent.

I'd whittle a bit!


Best,


Mike


Zettel at 14:14 on 20 May 2005  Report this post
Thanks Ti

Duly whittled. Better. Any more?

Regards

Z

Ticonderoga at 14:28 on 20 May 2005  Report this post
Much improved! Final stanza - maybe 'As' to start, in stead of 'And'?


best,


Mike

engldolph at 18:33 on 20 May 2005  Report this post
Hi Z


A strong piece on the mythic, dark power of blood.
We are, as you write in the first stanza, bathed in this from birth, as individuals and as a species. Some telling political allusions. It's an overwhelmingly dark picture you paint..a bit like being cut at the jugular...perhaps too much in parts (not sure, but at least on first reading) but then this is in keeping with the subject..

Some excellent lines for me:


In that first
unwilled gasp of life
the myth of blood
is incarnate


Blood the children
in the agony of the fox
as the blood of martyrs
stains the soil of faith


Water to wine
wine to blood
men always men

in the name of thy Lord
who created Man of a blood clot


The verse on the fuhrer didn't quite work for me..but I do get the point about the mystical blood cult of the Nazis..

enjoyed is probably not the right word to sum up..; but there is some strong and effective writing here for me

Mike




Zettel at 14:46 on 23 May 2005  Report this post
Ti

Could be either I think. Having indicated earlier that Christianity, Politics etc etc all had their dangerous blood myths the idea of the reference to the Koran was as an addition - hence the and. As would work too.

Mike

Thanks for the comments. I agree its a heavy topic. It was however prompted by seeing a film by Stan Brackhage an American avant garde filmaker of the birth of his daughter and it struck how the power and wonder of the emotins from such events is taken and distorted so terrifyingly. So I guess its a scary idea in the first place. Thanks for looking ang and thinking about it.

Regards

Z

Zettel at 16:52 on 23 May 2005  Report this post
Mike/Ti

Sorry my comments a bit rushed. Public machine time-out. Thanks again for taking the time to think and comment.

Regards

Z



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