Performance.
Posted: 16 April 2005
Word Count: 138
Summary: My Leap into Performance Poetry ,a finalist in "Short Fuse`s,Poetry Idol".Had a great time but didn`t win ,early days ah!
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Flyers handed out,will it be alright on the night ?
Oh yea some fame game bid?"Poetry idol 5!"
I`m worried about the mike,it`s just a an expression I don`t want to deny!
Thought I was going to be fit ,a pair of 34",Jeans,
Snugly tightly ,a little fat fit,I must admit.
I thought of learning my lines ,kept them though;thought I would lose it!
Six little kinda eggs ,clickity,click.
Pick out where the toys used to recide,
names curled up like a spring inside.
Jack`n box,me to be picked ,the last hit on the stage I start to recite.
I had a good time kicking out those poems,boom or bust ,
my first real performance,so an experiance thrust!
I didn`t win on the day,
just happy to be accepted to be able to perform and write ,my way!
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 joanie at 11:17 on 16 April 2005
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Sorry you didn't win but well done for being a finalist! You have conveyed the feelings which must surface at times like that, I'm sure. I can picture you clutching your lines secretly, like a comfort blanket, just in case......... and wondering how you look.
Vivid picture - keep trying; it sounds like you will!
joanie
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 Fearless at 11:56 on 16 April 2005
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It was a barnstorming performance, well done - I was dead proud!
Write on, Fearless
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You didn't come first, but I know you didn't come last. Not sure about the 'twat in the hat'!
WoZ
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Ticonderoga at 13:39 on 16 April 2005
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Know how you feel - I had a go at the Poetry Cafe a couple of weeks ago, and this sums it up very nicely!
Best,
Mike
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Lawrenco at 13:57 on 16 April 2005
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Sorry hadn`t finished the complete picture have finished the poem now!
Feel such a chump!Having grief loading up,but sorted out know.
I hope Joanie this gives a clearer picture!
It was a really good experience!
you can`t win them all ,great to hear you had a go at it Mike!
I hope you like the updted work fearless,thanks Bros!
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miffle at 14:39 on 16 April 2005
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Good for you Patrick! Loved the lines:
I had a good time kicking out those poems, boom or bust/ my first real performance, so an experiance thrust'
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AKA Tom Jones of poetry I thought ;-)
An energising piece as I am sure the adrenaline was on the night!
Like the idea of 'fat fit'... Yes I think a verging on torturous way of picking order... Did you read the Ant Stamp poem? I always liked that one...
Miffed to have missed you... Will you read again?
Nikki :-)
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Lawrenco at 19:08 on 17 April 2005
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Hi Nikki,Thanks for the comment,I did do the Black Ant Foot Stomp,sorry you missed it .
Next time will publicise better!
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paul53 [for I am he] at 19:45 on 17 April 2005
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Hi Patrick,
Didn't this appear in the Archive the other day? I thought you were sneaking one in like I do with poems that are a bit long or obscure.
Performance poetry? You are very brave. Stick me in front of an audience and you get a silent statue. Ply me with drink first and I'd bore everyone with a ten-hour life story. When I remarried in '95, the vicar asked "if the groom would like to say a few words?"
"Nope," I replied.
On a minor note, I find your poems easier on my old bloodshot eyes if you leave a space after punctuation, like this. Or this.
Well done for being a finalist.
Paul
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Lawrenco at 22:11 on 17 April 2005
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Hi Paul , I started to upload poem ran out of time posted half of it so it was incomplete ;but anyway thanks for comments, will not try to compact so much!
Thanks for the pointers.
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gard at 23:57 on 19 April 2005
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Hey congratulation son even getting to the semis!!!! Well done you, keep it up. Like the memoir piece here. Very solid and lots of images. What did you perform?
G
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Lawrenco at 01:58 on 21 April 2005
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Hi Gard, Yea it was a realy good experience got my creative thoughts going to get to the finals was good enough for a first submission.There a good crowd down at "short fuse",keep on truckin as they say!!!
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The Poems I did were More Squirel moments,The Aprehensive mint,The Black Ant Foot Stamp,Sausage Sandwich,Flock... Imagined(which had been reviced).
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TheGodfather at 14:44 on 25 April 2005
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Poetry Idol. That's hilarious. I'm proud of you just for entering it. That takes guts to go on Poetry Idol. And to make it to the finalists. Kudos.
TheGodfather
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 Mr B. at 21:02 on 04 June 2005
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Hi Pat!
Nice work - most of the pieces I've read of yours have had a style crying out for performance! I liked this - was quite jazzy and in-your-face! I'm not really up on the ins and outs of performance poetry so can't give anything particularly contructive. Still, I liked it from my own perspective!
Nice one,
Anthony
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