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WOZ AND THE WOMEN

by roovacrag 

Posted: 13 April 2005
Word Count: 88


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I ask him why it is,
how it came to be this way-
The many lovers and
the passion,intensity
of both his love and sadness.

Being crippled,stifled
when stimulation was required.
The power games..Chess-
but it was dominoes that fell.

His emotions challenged by
the rival belief of
Love as a shopping mall
where expensive packages is all.

Being cornered,besieged,
victim of saline spells
cast to capture attention.

Sitting there without
a word to cast,
he reveals his unwavering faith,
as he throws back his head
and laughs.






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jewelsx at 16:32 on 13 April 2005  Report this post
there was loads of lines in this poem that i thought were really very well written e.g.

The power games..Chess-
but it was dominoes that fell.

he reveals his unwavering faith,
as he throws back his head
and laughs.

etc etc....

only one thing - there appears to be a pattern to the stanzas except when it comes to the fourth one. Was that on purpose?

all the best
i loved the poem

jewelsx

paul53 [for I am he] at 19:35 on 13 April 2005  Report this post
Alice,
An excellent piece. Good useage of form here, and acute observation.
"saline spells cast" - very good.
Almost made me embarrassed being male - though these days I'm more drawn more to the kitchen than the bedroom, and the gunshop more than the kitchen, and the model railway exhibition more than...
Paul


joanie at 23:33 on 13 April 2005  Report this post
Alice, I love the closing lines, especially 'he reveals his unwavering faith'. Just right.

joanie

Elsie at 18:50 on 14 April 2005  Report this post
Alice - where've you been? I think you've been secretly having lessons. This is great. I agree about the saline spells. Life as a shopping mall, great. Glad to see you back.
Elsiex

roovacrag at 07:36 on 15 April 2005  Report this post
Thank you all for your comments.
Elsie had some help with a friend who knows Woz nearly as well as I do.
She takes credit as well.

xx Alice

Ticonderoga at 13:57 on 16 April 2005  Report this post
Alice - this does feel like a big leap in a new direction for you; there's a boldness in the content and the structure that is really impressive in a very new way compared with what I've previously read of yours. Brava!!


Love & Mercy,


Mike



P.S. I notice fearless hasn't commented yet!!!!




Fearless at 22:11 on 16 April 2005  Report this post
Dead on. You been speaking to my sister Trudy again, or was it...?

Inquisitive, Fearless

Lawrenco at 20:57 on 17 April 2005  Report this post
Such are the challengers of love and others perceptions there of: That make this arena so complex !
A well crafted poem.


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