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never explain, never complain.

by laurafraser 

Posted: 06 April 2005
Word Count: 162

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a little girl lovingly peels off a two-week scab
drops it into her glass of lemonade
looks at it for a moment as if it might be treasure,
then picks it up and drinks it.

a little girl peels off her scab,
drops it into her morning milk
contemplates nothing
then drinks it to the dregs.

a man says you have depression take Prozac
another says you have a clot
yet another says I disagree,
is it a wonder you’re now mad?

a little girl slips off the kitchen counter
closes the fridge as she passes it by
and steps into the garden.

passing the lunatics conference
she climbs to the top of her tree
where she stares at the clouds
wondering where they go to at night.

at the funeral, some years later
(death unknown, melancholic alcoholic),
the little girl has now grown,
and as she stares at the coffin she wonders out loud
but what will become of me now?

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Nell at 11:57 on 06 April 2005  Report this post
Ye gods laura, this is a quietly powerful piece of work. I just popped in to check something, saw the title and had to read then had to comment. There are questions I want to ask, yet I don't want answers, I want to read this again and again and come to my own (possibly shifting) conclusions. As the title says, never explain, never complain. I Love your original voice.


laurafraser at 15:17 on 06 April 2005  Report this post
Nell glad that you felt compelled to read!

I will proceed no further in explaining so as not to ruin your answerless questions, suffice to say the title is meant to point at the ultimate point of the poem in (I hope) more than one way....

Thank-you for your compliment,


Ticonderoga at 16:07 on 06 April 2005  Report this post
I have the impression at the end of the little girl looking at her own coffin, now a ghost, perhaps, wondering if things will improve away from the quotidian, material world. (?) Potent stuff!!



laurafraser at 16:25 on 06 April 2005  Report this post
thanks Mike


Beanie Baby at 21:51 on 06 April 2005  Report this post
Laura, this is truly amazing! So many twists and turns and very haunting- almost plaintive. Who is the mysterious little girl? What made her become the women she did? As Nell says, these are questions that do not seek answers. Reading this gave me a deep excitement which I only feel when I am clearly reading something remarkable. I cannot think of a single criticism. It's perfect. A work of art!

joanie at 09:42 on 07 April 2005  Report this post
Hi laura. I love the opening lines, then everything else just flows, leaving my mind racing. I think this has just the right amount of information, so that the reader has to ponder and wonder.

You have created a wonderful picture with phrases like 'looks at it for a moment as if it might be treasure' and 'she stares at the clouds/wondering where they go to at night'.

Beautifully formed. Very enjoyable.


laurafraser at 10:17 on 07 April 2005  Report this post

Thank-you so much I am increadibly flattered. I was so unsure about the reception that this piece would get, though more convinced that people would treat it with a bemused ????

So I am relieved and touched that it seems to have found an appreaciative audience!



Thank-you for your kind comments and i find it wonderful that it leaves your "mind racing" yey!


paul53 [for I am he] at 15:55 on 07 April 2005  Report this post
An original voice sums it up.
More, please.

laurafraser at 16:17 on 07 April 2005  Report this post
Thannk-you PAul.


Elsie at 19:16 on 08 April 2005  Report this post
Stumbled onto this - I really enjoyed reading it. I love the simplicity of the language.

laurafraser at 20:13 on 10 April 2005  Report this post
Thank-you Elsie.


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