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4 Baby Poems.

by laurafraser 

Posted: 01 April 2005
Word Count: 120
Summary: All Seperate

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An Empty Pill Box:

An empty pill box lies beheaded next to a
Bejewelled doll covered in emeralds and gems,
Take them all off, says the seer
And maybe your health will improve.

Funerals and Murials:

Funerals and murials remind us of something thatís past
That didnít manage to last,
Like hearts that people say have been broken, smashed to smitherines
People stumble forward trying to learn their means.

Polite Primroses:

Primroses say excuse me to the soil above their heads
That courteously moves aside.
Politeness in nature is a definite,
Like absurdity in our everyday lives.

A Kiss:

Pulsating lips press lightly
Against tattered velvet petals
Lying like scarlet sea slugs scattered
On the bed of the ocean floor.

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The Walrus at 12:54 on 05 April 2005  Report this post
As usual, some startling and vivid imagery Laura. I like the way you start each poem with this imagery and then bend it towards an insightful observation of a somewhat sad aspect of living. At least this was my take!

Enjoyed it, as always!


laurafraser at 18:42 on 05 April 2005  Report this post
Thank-you Christina,

Yes your"take' was spot on. With these poems I wa trying to reveal truths or illustrate ideas/truths whatever you want to call them in a relatively short poem so I am glad that you interpreted them in the way you did.


seanfarragher at 03:31 on 12 April 2005  Report this post
Beautiful imagery Laura, and the short poems have zip. Perhaps there is a way to combine these short poems into one poem that looks at some larger question, issue or statement. Beautiful language. A pleasure to read, and I particularly loved the Kiss.

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