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Thought Snippets

by Zettel 

Posted: 05 March 2005
Word Count: 167
Summary: Not quite poetry. But playing with ideas like skimming stones on a docile sea. The kind of thing you note on a scrap of paper - a 'zettel' in German.
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God came to me in a dream
I dreamed God came to me

Language of commitment
Language as commitment

Reading the words
Reading the sense

Following a rule
Being guided by a rule

Believing you know
Knowing you believe

Saying what you mean
Meaning what you say

I believe, help Thou mine unbelief
I know…I need no help

The pursuit of happiness
Finding happiness

I know I'm a bad tennis player
But I don't want to be a better player
I know I'm unkind
But I don't want to be kinder

Please talk to me
Don't talk at me

Doubt is the seed of thought
Certainty never germinates

There's nothing to apologise for
I won't apologise
Why should I apologise?
If I apologise….
When I apologise…then
Perhaps I should apologise
I ought to apologise
It is my duty to apologise
I regret it
I am ashamed
Sorry

Zettel 2005

(The last stanza dedicated to Mr Blair. Keep at it Tone - you're almost half-way there).






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joanie at 21:25 on 05 March 2005  Report this post
Hi Zettel. I like this idea; it's the sort of thing we all do to a greater or lesser extent and it's good to give it some form.

Thought snippets = thought-provoking.

joanie
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jewelsx at 21:57 on 05 March 2005  Report this post
A look into your psyche? i enjoyed this, i do the same kind of thing - scribbling down snip bits i sometimes work into a poem later. I loved the last stanza about apologising, very amusing.

all the best

jewelsx
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Zettel at 12:28 on 06 March 2005  Report this post
Joanie and Jewels

Glad you liked it.

Regards

Z
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roovacrag at 20:51 on 06 March 2005  Report this post
ZETTEL ,,poem and a well produced one.

I enjoyed the way you produced and perfomed it.

Well done.

XXAlice
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Zettel at 23:27 on 06 March 2005  Report this post
Thanks Alice

Z
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laurafraser at 18:17 on 07 March 2005  Report this post
the last paragraph could so easily be attributed our dear mayor Livingston given his latest slur. i like this "playing with ideas" poem. It reads well and makes you think, you have twisted concepts cleverly I love the bad tennis player part-very funny take on moralism

Laura
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Ticonderoga at 14:27 on 08 March 2005  Report this post
Great fun and very stimulating. 'Hammer your thoughts into unity', Yeats said; I'd like to see this hammered into a shape. perhaps along the lines of Pope (poet, not allegedly still living pontif!).
It's a juicy lollipop, but does it come in a different shape?

Best,

Mike
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fireweed at 19:29 on 08 March 2005  Report this post
Zettel, an interesting idea. I think it's a good thing to focus on what even the simplest words mean and the difference word order can make to meaning. The fact that you have made a poem of it is pretty ingenious, too.

Fireweed
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Zettel at 23:20 on 09 March 2005  Report this post
Laura Ti and Fi

Really encouraging, thanks. With poetry, as with drama, I think generally philosophical ideas are better implied or suggested elliptically within the work. Otherwiset the drama becomes preachy or didactic and the poetry can lack resonance or an essential elusiveness. But it's nice to try something more direct and find it gets a positive response.

Ta

Z
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engldolph at 07:56 on 10 March 2005  Report this post
Hi Z,

Clever and insightful. Suggestive rather than preaching; and as such, is interesting for for the reader.
I'm with Mike in that if you had a lind to, you could hammer this into a fully realised poem.

Lines that stood out over te rest for me:

God came to me in a dream
I dreamed God came to me

and

I know I'm a bad tennis player
But I don't want to be a better player



Stimulated my brain this morning..which was needed!

Mike
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Zettel at 13:55 on 10 March 2005  Report this post
Thanks Mike

I'll have to try to shape it a bit

Regards

Z
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