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How Much Longer?

by poemsgalore 

Posted: 26 February 2005
Word Count: 102


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How Much Longer?

How much longer will it be
before this fog will clear?
And how much further must I walk
to free me from all fear?
I donít want life to be a party,
Iím sick of sounding arty-farty -
maybe I should give in now
or fall down on my rear.
Thereís many who would laugh I know.
Thereís many who would cheer.
Thereís many more would walk away
and never shed one tear.
But I stopped caring long ago
and think itís time they knew
that they can do just as they please.
Iíll still be here next year.






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Ticonderoga at 14:16 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
I know the feeling only too well, poems! Well expressed; darkish, but with the hopeful declaration of defiance at the end. Strong and simple.


Best,

Mike

joanie at 14:36 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Hi poems. It sounds like you enjoyed writing this! I enjoyed reading. I like the positive feeling at the end.

joanie

paul53 [for I am he] at 16:12 on 26 February 2005  Report this post
Good stuff.

James Graham at 15:38 on 27 February 2005  Report this post
Enjoyed this very much. Rhyme and rhythm so smooth, it ticks like a Swiss watch. But though it's written in a light verse style and form, it seems to pass through a shadow on the way to its defiant ending.

James.

laurafraser at 13:26 on 28 February 2005  Report this post
you got it spot on poemsgalore

Laura

R-Poet at 18:20 on 28 February 2005  Report this post
A nicely crafted piece.

Hamburger Yogi & PBW at 05:38 on 01 March 2005  Report this post
Tolerance, simplicity and truth.

Hamburger Yogi

engldolph at 07:36 on 09 March 2005  Report this post
Hi poems,

Like others, I enjoyed the amazing smoothness of rhyme and rhythm, juxtaposed against a dark, defiant theme.

Enjoyed
Mike

jewelsx at 17:01 on 13 April 2005  Report this post
i just came across this and i have to say well done!

this describes so much of how i was feeling the other day, isn't that what poetry does at its best.

jewelsx


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